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IB Business Management HL Internal Assessment Example
Should Manchester United prioritize the full
reconstruction of Old Trafford to maximize financial performance?HL
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Official IB Result
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General feedback
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7.1·Strength
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The student usefully returns to the force-field evidence in the conclusion, showing that the final judgement is grounded in earlier analysis rather than added as an afterthought.
7.2·Strength
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The closing sentence neatly broadens the judgment to long-term financial performance, which helps the answer feel purposeful rather than purely numerical.
7.3·Strength
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The conclusion answers the research question directly and clearly states the recommendation, which is exactly what the final section should do.
7.4·Strength
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The conclusion is also consistent with the financial evidence, especially the payback period and ARR result. This coherence gives the recommendation greater credibility.
7.5·Suggestion
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The conclusion would be even stronger if it ended with one concise statement of the main reason for the recommendation. That would make the final judgement more memorable and avoid any sense of drift.
7.6·Weakness
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This closing line is a little broad, so the final message loses some precision. The student should tighten the wording to restate the recommendation and its key justification in one final sentence.
Criteria A: Integration of a Key Concept
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A.1Understanding and integration of key concept
Good
A.2Connection to organization
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
You show a strong, organization-specific understanding of change and keep Manchester United at the center of the discussion.
You connect the concept to financial, operational, and strategic implications rather than describing the decision in generic terms.
Your use of named evidence such as fan opinions, competitor comparison, and regeneration effects makes the argument feel grounded in the club’s real context.
Some sections become more technical than conceptual, so the idea of change is not always explicit in every paragraph.
The final synthesis could revisit the concept more clearly to show how it shapes the strategic meaning of the decision, not just the financial outcome.
1.1·Strength
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The student integrates the key concept clearly by linking “change” to financial, operational, and strategic implications, which helps the investigation stay concept-driven rather than becoming a purely investment appraisal exercise.
1.2·Strength
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The opening of the findings section shows good conceptual continuity: “The concept of change underpins Manchester United’s decision-making process.” This keeps the concept visible beyond the introduction and supports the overall analytical focus.
1.3·Strength
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The student makes an effective conceptual bridge here by stating that change is central to Lewin’s Force Field Analysis. That explicit framing strengthens the method choice and shows understanding of why the tool is appropriate.
1.4·Question
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How would the interpretation change if fan resistance or matchday disruption lasted longer than expected? A brief reflection on that would deepen the analysis of change as an ongoing process, not a one-off decision.
1.5·Weakness
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In the payback section, the discussion becomes more technical and the concept of change is less explicit. The student should connect the financial result back to how the change process affects stakeholder acceptance, operational disruption, or long-term adaptation.
1.6·Weakness
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The ARR section explains the calculation well, but the conceptual link to change is implied rather than analysed. The student should show how the club’s ability to adapt to modern stadium expectations shapes the meaning of the return figure.
1.7·Suggestion
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The final synthesis could explicitly revisit how change affected the club’s strategic position, not just the financial outcome. Doing so would make the concept feel fully integrated rather than mainly referenced at section openings.
Criteria B: Supporting Documents
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B.1Number of documents
Poor
B.2Relevance and depth
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
You use relevant supporting material from a range of useful source types, including financial reporting, benchmarking, media, and regeneration context.
The documents you chose are generally in-depth and closely tied to the question, especially where they support fan opinion, revenue comparisons, and investment arguments.
Your source set gives the investigation a broader evidence base than a single type of document would provide.
You include more than the stated 3–5 supporting documents, which weakens compliance with the task requirements.
Some sources would benefit from more evaluation of reliability, bias, or limitations, especially where the perspective may be optimistic or generalized.
2.1·Weakness
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The reference to Deloitte supports the argument, but the student does not fully evaluate the source’s perspective or possible limitations. The analysis would be stronger if it noted that industry reports may generalise across clubs and may not perfectly fit Manchester United’s specific context.
2.2·Weakness
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The bibliography still includes more than the allowed 3–5 supporting documents, so this remains a rubric-compliance issue. The student should reduce the document set to a smaller, more purposeful range and explain why those few sources are the most useful.
2.3·Suggestion
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The student should tighten source selection by prioritising documents with direct analytical value, such as the annual report, a fan survey source, and one benchmarking source. Fewer, stronger documents would better satisfy the rubric and improve coherence.
2.4·Strength
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The sources shown are highly relevant to the question and the club context, including fan opinion and stadium comparison evidence. This helps the investigation use documents that genuinely inform the decision rather than listing sources for breadth alone.
Criteria C: Selection and Application of Tools and Theories
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C.1Selection of tools and theories
Excellent
C.2Application and relevance
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
You choose tools that are clearly relevant to the research question, especially the force-field approach and the two financial appraisal methods.
Your force-field analysis is a strong fit because it captures both the pressures supporting the project and the obstacles against it.
You present the calculations clearly and use them to support a structured line of reasoning rather than relying on opinion alone.
The payback method would be stronger if it focused more explicitly on the extra cash generated by the project rather than broader revenue figures.
Some assumptions, especially around margins, ticket pricing, and attendance stability, are not fully justified or tested against alternatives.
A risk-focused tool or scenario check would make the appraisal more robust.
3.1·Strength
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The force-field table is a strong tool choice because it translates qualitative pressures into a structured comparison. The student uses it to show why the reconstruction has momentum despite important constraints.
3.2·Weakness
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The payback method is applied using projected total matchday revenue rather than clearly isolating incremental cash flows from the reconstruction. That weakens the tool’s validity, because payback should measure the extra cash generated by the investment itself.
3.3·Strength
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The payback calculation is clearly organised and directly relevant to the research question. Using a formal investment appraisal tool strengthens the line of reasoning because the student is not relying on opinion alone.
3.4·Question
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If the club’s matchday revenue dipped during construction, how much would the payback period change? Answering that would show whether the recommendation is resilient or dependent on optimistic assumptions.
3.5·Suggestion
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The student could improve tool selection by adding one risk-focused method, such as sensitivity analysis or NPV. That would better address uncertainty around attendance, costs, and timing, which are important in a project of this scale.
3.6·Weakness
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The assumption set is stated, but the student does not test alternative outcomes. A short sensitivity or scenario check on ticket prices, attendance, or construction delay would make the appraisal more robust.
3.7·Weakness
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The ARR discussion depends on a margin assumption, but the student does not justify why that margin remains appropriate after a major rebuild. The evaluation would be stronger if the assumption were defended with evidence or compared against an alternative estimate.
3.8·Strength
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The ARR table shows careful application of a second quantitative method, which adds triangulation to the evaluation. This helps the student compare short-term and long-term investment logic.
Criteria D: Analysis and Evaluation
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D.1Data selection and use
Excellent
D.2Analysis quality
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
You use data purposefully to support both the qualitative and quantitative parts of the investigation.
You do more than present information; you interpret it and relate it to the club’s strategic decision-making.
Your comparison with other clubs and your use of external evidence strengthen the credibility of your analysis.
Some assumptions are acknowledged but not fully tested, so the evaluation is not as deep as it could be.
A few parts of the analysis remain a little general when discussing future revenue effects or downside risk.
More quantitative testing of alternative outcomes would strengthen the final judgement.
4.1·Strength
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The student goes beyond listing forces and actually explains why “increased matchday revenue” matters strategically. This is stronger analysis because it connects the data point to the club’s decision-making context.
4.2·Suggestion
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The student could improve evaluation by ranking the restraining forces not only by importance but also by uncertainty. That would show which risks are most threatening and which are most manageable.
4.3·Strength
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The acknowledgement of using “sensitivity or scenario analysis” shows strong evaluative awareness. The student recognises that the argument would be more reliable if key assumptions were stress-tested.
4.4·Weakness
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The data table is useful, but the analysis would be stronger if it explained how each input was derived and whether any figures were rounded or estimated. Without that, the reader cannot fully judge the reliability of the calculation.
4.5·Weakness
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The student notes risks such as “economic downturns” and “fluctuating attendance,” but these remain general. A stronger evaluation would quantify at least one downside or show how sensitive the recommendation is to those risks.
4.6·Strength
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The comparison with Tottenham Hotspur is used analytically rather than just illustratively, helping justify why a stadium investment can produce commercial gains over time.
4.7·Weakness
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This is a useful evaluation move, but it stops short of actually testing the claim. The student should show how much the ARR would rise or fall under a realistic alternative revenue assumption rather than only stating that modern facilities could improve returns.
4.8·Strength
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The student supports the ARR interpretation with external evidence, which improves credibility and prevents the analysis from relying solely on the student’s own calculation.
4.9·Weakness
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The analysis recognises the long-term nature of the project, but it remains somewhat general in its treatment of future income streams. More precise reasoning about which revenue streams are most likely to change would strengthen the evaluation.
4.10·Question
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Would the recommendation still hold if the reconstruction delayed other strategic investments the club needs? Considering opportunity cost would deepen the evaluation beyond the payback and ARR figures.
Criteria E: Conclusions
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E.1Consistency with evidence
Excellent
E.2Answer to research question
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
You answer the research question directly and clearly with a definite recommendation.
Your conclusion is consistent with the evidence you present earlier in the report.
You bring together the main strands of your argument in a way that shows a coherent final judgement.
The ending could be more concise and tightly focused.
You could strengthen the conclusion further by briefly showing why the recommendation remains valid despite uncertainty.
Criteria F: Structure
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F.1Organization and structure
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
Your report follows a logical sequence from context to analysis to final judgement.
Headings and section order make the investigation easy to follow.
The table of contents and the separation of sections help create a clear reading experience.
The introduction would be slightly stronger if it restated the research question more explicitly in the body of the paragraph.
A few more signposting sentences could improve flow between sections.
5.1·Strength
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The table of contents gives the report a clear roadmap, which supports the reader’s understanding of how the investigation develops from concept to evaluation.
5.2·Strength
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The introduction is well placed and gives useful context before the analytical sections begin, helping the report feel organised and purposeful.
5.3·Strength
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The opening paragraph sets up the context and stakes of the decision effectively, which gives the report a focused starting point.
5.4·Suggestion
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The introduction could be slightly sharper if it restated the research question in the body of the paragraph, not only on the title page. That would anchor the reader more explicitly at the start of the analysis.
5.5·Suggestion
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The student could strengthen flow by adding brief signposting sentences at the start of each major section. This would make the transition from concept discussion to findings to appraisals even smoother.
5.6·Strength
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The conclusion is clearly separated from the body of the report, which supports readability and shows a logical progression through the investigation.
5.7·Question
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Could the final conclusion be condensed into fewer sentences without losing meaning? A tighter ending would make the overall argument feel more controlled and deliberate.
Criteria G: Presentation
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G.1Required elements
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
You include the required elements and present them in a clear, readable format.
Your tables and figures are well labelled, which makes the investigation easy to navigate.
The document looks tidy and professionally organised in the sections shown.
Some visual elements could include slightly more explanatory detail to make them even easier to interpret at a glance.
6.1·Strength
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The figure caption clearly identifies the force-field analysis, which makes the visual evidence easy to follow and properly linked to the discussion.
6.2·Strength
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The force-field table presents the key factors in a structured way, making the comparison between driving and restraining forces straightforward for the reader.
6.3·Suggestion
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If the student wants to improve presentation further, the force-field table could be slightly refined by ensuring each label is paired with a short explanatory note. That would make the scoring rationale even easier to interpret at a glance.
6.4·Strength
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The payback calculations are presented in a sequence that is easy to follow, which supports the transparency of the method.
6.5·Strength
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The payback period figure is labelled clearly, so the reader can immediately identify the purpose of the table and connect it to the written evaluation.
6.6·Strength
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The ARR table also communicates the calculation process clearly, helping the reader see how the final figure was obtained.
6.7·Strength
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The ARR section is similarly well signposted, which helps the report maintain clarity across multiple quantitative tools.